Nice try
It looks as though you spent a long time on this movie, but you seriously need some other software to draw with, That way it won't look like you scribbled the frames in a note book.
It would also be good if you have a slightly more realistic style of moving, sometimes it looked like a 2 year old made the people slide along the floor like a dog with an infected anaul gland.
Appart from that this was ok I guess...
But its gonna take more than a heavey load movie with pencil ledd on papper frames to impress me to 10.